Below you will find examples taken from successful applications. You’ll also find some examples that didn't give us enough detail to contribute to a successful application.
Notice the differences, and use these as a guide to help you start writing.
|In year 10, I completed work experience in a nursing home and I enjoyed the experience so much that I volunteered to return again this year. I have visited the local nursing home, reading to two aged persons (once/week for 10 weeks), and participated in a concert, playing the piano and singing in a small choir. (13 hours involvement).||I have provided care and company to the aged community by visiting a nursing home on a weekly basis. I like talking to the elderly people in the nursing home and I have been invited back next year.|
|I took part in my schools immersion trip to Vietnam in March 2015. After applying and being chosen to participate in July 2014, my team of eight students was required to raise $3000 in funds to be used on our project of building a new classroom. We attended seven preparatory meetings prior to departure. The week in Vietnam included eight hour days of physical work and classroom support for the students in the village. Since returning I have continued to fund raise for this community and I maintain communication with the teachers in the school which we supported. (At least 60 hours)||I went to Vietnam for a week in March this year. My team raised funds and worked every day for 5 days building a school. I would like to continue to perform community service when I leave school and that is why I want to enrol at ACU.|